Hi Liam, I enjoyed reading your weather poem. I like how the beginning of the poem starts with a metaphor - as if autumn has arms. Keep up the great work!
Hi Liam, I agree with Miss Haerewa. Good use of precise verbs 'stretching', 'nipping', 'embrace'. This poem shows you are developing in your understanding of personification.
You are beginning to show your thinking for maths. See if you can use equations or tables to further show your thoughts. Well done!
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Hi Liam,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your weather poem. I like how the beginning of the poem starts with a metaphor - as if autumn has arms. Keep up the great work!
Hi Liam, I agree with Miss Haerewa. Good use of precise verbs 'stretching', 'nipping', 'embrace'. This poem shows you are developing in your understanding of personification.
ReplyDeleteYou are beginning to show your thinking for maths. See if you can use equations or tables to further show your thoughts. Well done!
very cool Liam I love your work
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